Essay Evaluator

Your draft

Ever since I joined the school science fair, I have been fascinated by how small design choices change an experiment's outcome. Last spring I rebuilt my water-filtration prototype three times, and each failure taught me something a textbook could not. This summer I want to learn how professional researchers decide which failures are worth chasing…

• Strength: a concrete, memorable opening scene.
• Improve: tie the prototype to what you hope to learn next.
• Compare: similar to a strong example essay that quantifies the result.
• Next step: cut the first sentence and start with the failed prototype.